Hallo,

wir müssen zu morgen in Englisch einen Text über Standortfaktoren schreiben. Das habe ich auch getan. Könntet ihr diesen mal durchlesen und mich auf grammatikalische, inhaltliche oder Rechtschreibfehler hinweisen? Oder sind solche Threads generell unerwünscht?

Hier mein Text:

Important location factors for companies

Companies have to pay attention of a lot of things before choosing a place for a subsidiary or the new headquarter. In the following I want to explain the most important points.
The first main point is transport. The costs to transport products or other needed goods to or from the location need to be small. This is a logistics problem to be efficient and cheap at the same time. Therefore it is important to have good connections to traffic. That means to have for example highways or rivers in the near.
Moreover the company has to check the market situation. That means if there are customers who would buy products. Otherwise it wouldn’t be profitable. Ways to do it are for example surveys or studies.
Resources are another important topic. The raw materials for production must be available in the near or being brought quickly. To choose the best there must be also a wide range of raw materials.
To run the production the company needs electricity and gas. It is necessary that they are cheaply and easily to get at the location. It’s better when you can choose between more providers because of choosing the best one for you. The company has to design the production process under consideration of saving energy.
The company also needs motivated labour. So it has to choose a region where it can be sure to get enough labour supply. Determinant therefore are universities or other institutes. The salaries of employed labour also need to be as small as possible. If the company also has labour and just wants to move to another location it can think about ‘restructuring’ to make workers redundant. In result it saves money that means more profit.
Another main point is the production site. The size of the real estate has to be big enough for all production activities. It is necessary in relation to possible new costs the company won’t need to extend its area. Moreover the geologic formation must allow to build halls or buildings for production.
All in all the location must give the opportunities to raise capital by investing capital.

Danke für eure Mühe!

Marco D. hat folgendes geschrieben:

Important location factors for companies Companies have to pay attention of a lot of things before choosing a place for a subsidiary or the new headquarter. In the following I want to explain the most important points. The first main point is transport. The costs to transport products or other needed goods to or from the location need to be small. This is a logistics problem to be efficient and cheap at the same time. Therefore it is important to have good connections to traffic. That means to have for example highways or rivers in the near. Moreover the company has to check the market situation. That means if there are customers who would buy products. Otherwise it wouldn’t be profitable. Ways to do it are for example surveys or studies. Resources are another important topic. The raw materials for production must be available in the near or being brought quickly. To choose the best there must be also a wide range of raw materials. To run the production the company needs electricity and gas. It is necessary that they are cheaply and easily to get at the location. It’s better when you can choose between more providers because of choosing the best one for you. The company has to design the production process under consideration of saving energy. The company also needs motivated labour. So it has to choose a region where it can be sure to get enough labour supply. Determinant therefore are universities or other institutes. The salaries of employed labour also need to be as small as possible. If the company also has labour and just wants to move to another location it can think about ‘restructuring’ to make workers redundant. In result it saves money that means more profit. Another main point is the production site. The size of the real estate has to be big enough for all production activities. It is necessary in relation to possible new costs the company won’t need to extend its area. Moreover the geologic formation must allow to build halls or buildings for production. All in all the location must give the opportunities to raise capital by investing capital.

Hab mal markiert, was ich nicht richtig, bzw. nicht schön finde. Hoffe du kommst selber auf die Fehler, sonst meld dich nochmal!

to pay attention of a lot of things --> Sie müssen auf viele Dinge achten. Wie soll das sonst heißen?
or the new headquarter. --> Was soll daran falsch sein?
need to be small --> Vielleicht 'have to be small'?
connections to traffic. --> das sollte Verkehrsanbindung bedeuten
That means if there are customers who would buy products. --> "Das bedeutet, ob Konsumenten da sind, die Produkte kaufen würden."
because of --> heißen 'wegen'!
All in all --> Was ist daran nicht gut?

Im Grunde kann ich zu allen Dingen nichts sagen...

- pay attention TO sth...
- Verkehrsanbindung: transport connection (AE) oder transport connexion (BE)
- It’s better IF you can choose between more providers because of choosing the best one for you (nicht when.. when ist immer zeitlich gemeint)

mehr faellt mir momentan nicht ein..

mfg smikey

Zu (1.) geb' ich dir mal noch'n Tipp :

dict.leo.org/ende?lp...ention&relink=on
Gruß

Danke für eure Hilfe, an because of halte ich aber nach wie vor fest!
Hier der neue Text:

Important location factors for companies

Companies have to pay attention to a lot of things before choosing a place for a subsidiary or a new headquarter. In the following I want to explain the most important points.
The first main point is transport. The costs to transport products or other needed goods to or from the location need to be small. This is a logistics problem to be efficient and cheap at the same time. Therefore it is important to have a good transport connection. That means to have for example highways or rivers in the near.
Moreover the company has to check the market situation. That means there must be customers who would buy products.. Otherwise it wouldn’t be profitable. Ways to do it are for example surveys or studies.
Resources are another important topic. The raw materials for production must be available in the near or being brought quickly. To choose the best there must be also a wide range of raw materials.
To run the production the company needs electricity and gas. It is necessary that they are cheaply and easily to get at the location. It’s better if you can choose between more providers because of choosing the best one for you. The company has to design the production process under consideration of saving energy.
The company also needs motivated labour. So it has to choose a region where it can be sure to get enough labour supply. Determinant therefore are universities or other institutes. The salaries of employed labour also need to be as small as possible. If the company also has labour and just wants to move to another location it can think about ‘restructuring’ to make workers redundant. In result it saves money that means more profit.
Another main point is the production site. The size of the real estate has to be big enough for all production activities. It is necessary in relation to possible new costs the company won’t need to extend its area. Moreover the geologic formation must allow to build halls or buildings for production.
To sum up the location must give the opportunities to raise capital by investing capital.

Calculon hat folgendes geschrieben:

Zu (1.) geb' ich dir mal noch'n Tipp : dict.leo.org/ende?lp...ention&relink=on Gruß

Ja, pay attention to, oder was wolltest du mir damit jetzt sagen?

Jepp, aber während ich schrieb' hatte Smikey bereits gepostet. Ich hatte nur eine subtilere Methode gewählt.
Zum Text:
- statt place (1.Zeile) würde ich location nehmen
- statt explain (2.Zeile) würde ich describe nehmen
- statt "to get at the location" (14.Zeile) lieber "to get to the location"
- because of choosing the best... (15.Zeile) ??
- Den folgenden Satz kapier' ich nicht:
It is necessary in relation to possible new costs the company won’t ...
Sonst ganz gut.
Gruß

It’s better if you can choose between more providers because of choosing the best one for you.
-> Soll heißen:
Es ist besser, wenn man zwischen mehreren Anbietern wählen kann, um sich den besten auszusuchen.
Wie heißt es besser?

It is necessary in relation to possible new costs the company won’t ...
-> Dazu muss man sich den vorherigen Satz anschauen:
The size of the real estate has to be big enough for all production activities. It is necessary in relation to possible new costs the company won’t need to extend its area.
Soll heißen:
Das Grundstück muss für alle Produktionsaktivitäten groß genug sein. Dies ist notwendig, im Bezuf auf möglich Neukosten, damit die Firma ihr Gebiet nicht noch ausbauen muss.

It’s better if you can choose between more providers.
Oder: It’s better if you can choose between more providers to find the best offer.

It is necessary considering possible additional costs (zusätzlich anfallende Kosten - siehe LEO) to the company if it had to extend its area.
Sinngemäß dasselbe, klingt aber besser.

Gruß

Calculon hat folgendes geschrieben:

It’s better if you can choose between more providers. Oder: It’s better if you can choose between more providers to find the best offer. It is necessary considering possible additional costs (zusätzlich anfallende Kosten - siehe LEO) to the company if it had to extend its area. Sinngemäß dasselbe, klingt aber besser. Gruß

Hey cool, das klingt ja richtig gut!